Zen - Lust pretty much rules my life sometimes. This was a sort of quirky yet truthful example of how spiritually distorted a man's perspective on love can be. I thought it was cool. Good job.
Pent - Neat. Ace even. The short lines helped the progression, but I don't think you needed any help. You're adept at directing aggressive rhyme patterns without getting distracted from the task at hand, completing a successful story with a proper twist.
My vote goes to Pent Up.
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