[Adonis]

Arid - I don't particularly like how you damn near dumb'd your verse down by highlighting the rhymes, I'm a good enough reader to catch those on my one you know? Also, this really, really irked me..."it wouldn't have dropped if...
I've balled my fists and called for my family don't they watch this?"

I'm sure you did it on purpose because the question IS slightly answered, just seems really weird to follow a question you asked and not come out in the open to answer it. Yeah I don't know, I see the verse as maybe too ambitious. A guy struggling with dead family members, I assume they are good, then jesus killing evil doers and moons and shit. A bit to cloudy and clustered for my usual tastes.

Cert - Nice verse littered with multies while weaving a tight knit story. I gathered it was a shrink session where the person being "shrunk"???? Always thought shrink was a weird term although I'm sure its rooted and works, anyways. The shrink basically saying let it all out. Good mood, really solid inners that didn't falter at all or slow down from start to end. You rhymed fragmented sentences on like three occasions, which I admittedly hate with a passion but in this case...

Vote Certain

Stronger writing overall/More enjoyable.