[Mitch]

i think ur a good writer, but i also think u need to let go of trying to be a good writer. your style sounds as if you are trying to be a good writer in an unnatural way, and it to me it seems that at the start u were kinda bored until u found the flow, and then u stuck to the flow. try writing something without expecting it to be anything, and just write, not even rhyme. sorry if this sounds condescending these are just tips i use for my own writing. i think ur a good writer, but the key to expanding is to not ever be embarrassed about what you write, and to recognize it as a shade of yourself.