[PancakeBrah]

"drinking the truths I fed you, intoxicated with lies
sedated and high. i've contemplated for help
what kills you isn't the virus, it's the inoculation itself
it's what helps you, and what hurts you; it's complicated as hell"

"date at 8, before dinner
ignoring the nose bleed as I stare in the mirror
tighten my neck-tie. debonair of elixir
ignored the pain, hailed a taxi to a chain up in Gloucester
took off her pea coat, pulled up her chair, and with posture
stayed after pay. After lobster. Chatting crucially after
doodled on napkins. flirty exchanges on contours
draw a monster for me. now.. what makes it a monster?"

"torpedoed, and we fall. Mistaking distress cause i'm loyal
disrobing attempts at joy. sex as a crutch to enjoy you
aware, but yet not so. picked up on the influenced behavior
clues like, you were nice to me, but were rude to the waiter"

"like a photo out of focus is a blunder, but ten are a trend"

+the last line were all strong standouts here. The second section I quoted was particularly good. It's one of the best descriptive bursts I've read on here in awhile, although I haven't read much here in awhile. The wording in that section, and throughout really, was just perfectly on point. "stayed after pay" and "chatting crucially" are what I'm talking about. Really painted the scene well. You can see the dimmed lights, tablecloth, and atmosphere of the setting and you didn't have to say a word about all that to do it. Really well done piece, enjoyed the tone.

Thanks.