[PancakeBrah]

I spoke words that co exist... with cheavenist
mission be in teen girls posters me, posing bent, //
got swerve appeal y'all niggas urkle still
I sit back observe females just to see the thirst is real, //
we train hoes it's nothing, have your tone adjusted
sex my cuzzin slut n never disrespect the 2nd coming, //

I don't believe that cheavenist is an actual word. I'm going to assume you meant chauvinist, what with the ensuing lines. The second line seems to be missing a word or a punctuation mark or something, unless your aim was to not make sense. If that was the case you were successful. Third line's fine, in comparison. The last line here also confused me. So you're going to sex your cousin slut? Or, sex your cousin, slut and never disrespect the 2nd coming? As in, you're going to engage in coitus with a relative, the slut around while never disrespecting Jesus? Or, are you inferring that you are the 2nd coming? Many questions here.

Intersections gunning pedal pumping
pulling up in gas stations pumping gas sitting on sum twenty something's, //

Your use of repetition contrasted with slang was titillating here.

metalical stare impair ya vision that's from the glare
chenadu blacc google me with grammatical errors//

I did already, but thank you for the recommendation in case of further queries in regards to your grammar.

... I'm here to be known and bare clones
awoke from hibernation, stand clear when the bear groans//

This is executive level braggadocio.

stumbled out the Beer Cave with a Icehouse Edge
heart in a icebox.. chip away the ice with a sledge, //
cop my, nikes with checks who you need to check for
bars hooks that must stang ..while you in your Ford nikkuh..//

The metaphors and wordplay here seems a bit stretch and messy but who am I to judge.

Got a money tree, Fall, imma rake a grand
we'll see how much he'll figure like that racist brand //
fames the plan
opportunity knocks fast as broken contracts on a rent a center payment plan//

I heretofore was unaware of the expedited harassment of rent a center agents in regards to broken contracts, thank you.

I'm way too advanced nigga knew that way in advance

I, for one, will offer disagreement in this regard.

when my cuz served that white girl like save the last dance,//
and got caged in the can,
when I worked at Sam goodys and... CDs and cassette tapes would get scanned, //
and missy couldn't stand the rain with timberland
I couldn't either, muddy waters stained my timberlands //
needed suede cleaner... way before Instagram

This actually wasn't that bad. I'd say this was the strongest section of this piece, overall.

50 a 8th chiefer.. more instead of grams//
... My head was crammed with dirt... and brainwashed stain walls
head was crammed in her.. that brain wash grey skull //
he man.. off the chain, if Ray Charles
- could see he'd trip off R rated shit on my radar.//

Ray Charles is dead so even if he were able to see it would be of little use to him.


Pithy comments aside, your writing needs a lot of editing. The lack of grammatical consistency hurts reader comprehension severely in this piece. I often times had little clue what you were even attempting to get across (I could infer, generally, but that onus isn't on me). This read like a piece someone would've written back when text first started up. The wordplays were kind of corny and none of the brags or insults were cleverly written. The flow was decent enough, but you didn't pull any neat tricks in that department. Pretty standard cadence, if such a thing exists. Rhymes were just okay. Read around. If this is the lane of writing you'd like to continue on (bragging/flexing) then check out some SnF verses.

Thanks.