Homos package all over the streets similar to FedExs strife
I make rash decisions, but none like your sex life
vs
Fuck his investments, my pump'll have his stock deflate from my quill,
If E*TRADE with the stock he'll need financial help to pay for da hospital bill.
Tied in quotes. TBH, this was close. E's bars are generic as fuck but his bars are nicely worded and to the point where Spoke's a little more creative and isn't so good at delivering his concepts in a harsh manner. I liked that shadow box concept, even tho I've seen a few but your execution was horrible, bro. It was soft as if YOU were the one actually doing exactly what you claimed your opponent was doing, if that makes any sense. You need to flip your concepts a few times and select the harsher and cleaner version. Wording and execution kills you, bro. That's definitely the only thing holding you back from progressing man. You have some decent'ish concepts but your execution hinders the effectiveness/potential of your concepts to land harshly. The bar quoted, is what I am referencing and or can use for an example. Cool concept with a nice delivery/execution. Rest, not so much. I've told you on several occasions, write your concepts down a few times in different forms. Always select the harsher one that actually insults your opponent.
v/E - barely.
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