[Adonis]

Zen - This fit the topic superbly my friend. I really enjoyed this verse. It wasn't head-scratchingly complex or mind-numbing with depth, it simply is what it is. The flow was good and I rather enjoyed the use of slang. It gave the character a identity with out having to give his background, as i wrote that I laughed because damn I must be racist. Anyone else picture some black dude??? Asshole!!!!!


PP - Flawless in the fluidity department, and I truly mean that. This short verse read seamless and with ease, despite the brevity you still managed to weave a solid story all the while not being up front in the beginning, or the end for that matter. What I mean is, I took this as Aliens, but it could very well be Earthlings exploring another planet or moon. I think you hit this topic clean and pure, the verse was good start to end, zero negative to say about it.


Close battle here, two polar opposite verses. One was more of a typical Topical, the other was flung from center-left field, yet both were extremely effective and equally enjoyable reads. This should be very close in votes and i'd imagine it all being based off of preference because these both are in different hemispheres. Except for the imagery part, you both shined there equally.

In the end, I got

ZenLand

Winning in a nearly too close to call bout. Its not often I read a what is mainly narrative with slang at that, and the writer not fall flat on his face. For that reason I gave extra points for degree of difficulty, thus my vote.