[Flow]

Ok so i liked this drop, but more for the content then for the rhyme scheme... So i suppose its a double edged sword fam.

I think the scheme you had was good enough to read, but I think this peice needs polishing. Multis would keep that flow rolling tight and I feel you missed out on that. Also you had to simple a scheme fam, it was very much a one word rhyme pattern, you had a few lines which this isnt applicable to but I dont think that was intentional. If you could add that element then it would do wonders for how it reads aloud.

Finally on the critque Id suggest you watch the syllable counts, one some lines it felt it wasnt read aloud...Some lines felt a little off beat with the rest but then thats down to how you go at it I suppose.

On the positives as i mentioned, the content was dope, gripping and is certainly half the battle of a good drop. Keeping someone engaged while rhyming is the skill, an you have that.

Hoping the story wasnt too truthal but props if it is.

Thanks for the feedback on my drop fam, keep rhyming, an anythin I said you disagree with, want to question, dont understand etc just holla.

Flo