Split, repetition of the "prove they wrong - another generation" part was a subtle and intelligent comment. Seems to suggest a cycle, you are playing with the stereotypes of foolish youth nicely. Enjoyed how the characters weren't so one dimensional, some parts designed to draw sympathy others indifference. It is more complex commentary than it seems, because it sort of seemed like largely descriptive until I realized the repetition etc.
Juxtaposition, main criticism is the language is too mixed. Enjoyed the simplistic language from the perspective of a child (E.g., first section) but then you follow such simplistic lines up with "was attached to an intimate human act and once perverted I'd react accordingly" - I am thinking who is this narrator: a young person reflecting or an old professor? It was not good to have such an unclear narrator, detracted a lot from everything else. Voted for Split.
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