Objective, even though it was much shorter, felt that it was more contained and focused. Not a story but that is O.K. because not everything needs to be a story, kind of like an essay-rhyme, you set out your argument at the very start which was good for the structure and helped me to follow along. Arguments themselves were simple and strong. Rhyming was good and simple which worked well in this instance. Discussing music was the obvious concept given the topic but still good nonetheless.
King Keith, all the dictionary parts are creative. Enjoyed the wider scope of the topic for underground rather than just music. Last part however felt like a step backwards rather than a progression, you started with the other paragraphs on a grand scale to end with all those specific references did not seem to fit. Rhyming was more advanced than objective's, but the majority of pop-culture references (Fraggle Rock, V etc.)was off-putting and kind of ironic considering the topic of underground. Voted for Objective.
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