Gonna be honest and say what nobody else has had the balls to say....this wasn't good, at all. It was generic, it was simple and it was boring. Your rhymes were predictable. You need to work on your flow, you need to work on pretty much every aspect of your writing...I didn't like this. Much improvement is needed.
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Explicit and poisonous violent crime.
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