Thread: ZenLand Part II
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Old 04-14-2013, 04:40 AM   #15
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Impressive work here, Zen :)

The main difference between this and part one was the tone.

Part one had a theological vibe to it. This appeared as more a social intonation (Though the interrelation is there).

Loved the dialogue. It was natural and pretty convincing; Not an easy feat in regards to this type of writing arena. I'm not quite sure if there's internal dialogues going on but i felt it (dialogue) was appropriate well executed.

I'm horrible at feedback so i will leave it at that.

Overall great job ;)
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