Impressive work here, Zen :)
The main difference between this and part one was the tone.
Part one had a theological vibe to it. This appeared as more a social intonation (Though the interrelation is there).
Loved the dialogue. It was natural and pretty convincing; Not an easy feat in regards to this type of writing arena. I'm not quite sure if there's internal dialogues going on but i felt it (dialogue) was appropriate well executed.
I'm horrible at feedback so i will leave it at that.
Overall great job ;)
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