[PancakeBrah]

Behold the Sphinx; this here is an ode to kings
Donating souls, I bring them gold from Minskt
Wholesome prince, the last kin active, throne in eclipse

Cool opening. 'Throne eclipsed' popped in my head after I read the last line. Would've been smoother and more of mesh of words Boggle pop of rhymes. Still very fun for everybody the way it stands.

Aligning chakras minding good and evil, grow in the middle
I was taught by the author I should notice the symbols

Grow in the middle was meh, but that second line was cool. Sort of ominous but on the surface innocent enough.

But those survivors live on, cut throats who violent in thought
Up close their eyes look on to the sight, utmost giant of storms
Uh oh! The Lions been charmed, rush home tonight and succumb to it

Liked the bold. The italicized text put me off although it did help the flow of reading it. Read it as a staccato. This also highlights a problem of some shit seeming not to rhyme, though. I can catch soft rhymes and all that jazz and you definitely vary your scheme enough to keep everything smooth but certain spots were tricky.

Beauty born with a sword close, cold thorns on a warm rose

Well worded.


What does it mean? I'm dumb. Fun to read, though, and overall good. You're a very special person.

Overall this was good.