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Old 12-23-2014, 11:49 AM   #2
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Simple, but effective. I liked the whole theme really, and you'll make a great father if you're not already one. My favorite line: "I'll protect its scars with clothes, that stretch as far as lies
I let it onto more as it's stretching for the skies..." You did a nice job here of keeping on topic and also touching base on how one might feel before they have their first kid. The whole "I'm going to be a great dad" thing. I like this, keep writin my friend!
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