[King Ra.]

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OPEN MIC FEATURE #2


"Sincerely Some Delusional Freak"
written by dead man

accused of deceit, truth is for the foolish and weak
perusing in peace, from the comfort of a cubicle seat
i like a girl with beautiful teeth
cuz it's more fulfilling when i knuckle-fuck 'em loose in her sleep
translucent as sheets, ghostface silhouette, a mutant physique
tunafish sushi to eat, but only feast on uvula meat
space odysseys, the universe is mucus and wheat
so my eyes are wide shut, there's nothing new here to see
NEVER has human been free. i'm writing just to loosen the leash,
so it's stupid to think that anyone of you could compete
"I do it for me" - if you buy that shit, here's twenty receipts
cause you're a waste of energy. a fuselage leak
clueing elites into crucial news for a lucrative fee
there's a thousand ways to view the machine.
oxygen fluid to breathe through hollow plastic tubular reeds
it takes the death of their professor for a student to lead.

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No Show: The Ego Stroker Version 2.0
Produced by: Adonis



Xces – So I have my predictions article in the mag, and I regret completing before reading your verse. Consider this fair warning to the rest of the league, Xces is no slouch and is a vet somewhere. Dude has a strong grasp on the language and gives multies a new light, because it's not just rhyme for rhyme sake, he rhymes with knowledge and clear direction while weaving inners and Multies with a short stroke...

Originally Posted by Xces

He conceived a theatre distressed, an eased me into death
Relieving my inherent weakness of being a creature of flesh.
His speaking of intents besieged me with the deepest of regrets
When seething breath excreted “I’ve seen you repressed,
As a peon dressed in a priests robe, deceived by a sect.”

Xces wrote a very powerful verse that to me read as a dream of mixed images of the end of time. The Visuals were potent, from the flaming false prophet riding flames, to the image of the ship carrying death. This was a biblical roller coaster that contained soo many ideas, yet had a main goal in site. Great verse brother, look forward to reading you next week.


Juxtaposition – Damn, I read two new members in a row and I'm left impressed. Strong writing, loved the take on the topic, you twisted the quote into the movie and the movie was played on real life, dope.

Originally Posted by Juxtaposition

They say it takes an entire village to raise children,
but how many media stations to mind control a nation?
It's so invasive how they cut us, mentally fuck us...
Fathers today are lolly gagging pops distracted,
So sons grow up easily get licked and treated like suckers.

You're writing is spoken word-esque, I like it. There is imagery and strong use of language, but the rhymes are lose and free flowing much like a spoken word which is rare, and risky. But this verse I liked. I think the quote sums it up, but one critique... Shia Labeof is dope, that's my only complaint. A verse about a war movie, but you discovered in fact that the war never happened making a movie created as real life truly never happened. So you spun that idea into the quote above and ran with it, again; loved the concept and the writing was different, but enjoyable.


Innovator – I liked this verse, you took it the distance. You still have some work as far as phrasing and word choice go, but this verse was enjoyable. The quoted speech is hard always to keep flow, rhyme and believable in real life conversation so becareful with that. I liked the full circle though, you explained the addiction, then gave the character life and background of using and not using, then killed him off with a nice metaphor...

Originally Posted by Innovator[/quote

"Listen..

I’m done the blood glistens
I’m sorry for the incisions
I’ve made to my body but i was in prison...
With addiction i was smitten
rigor mortis bitten
so I chased the needle
till my plight was written in pigment”

All in all a verse that shows improvement compared to the first verse of yours I read a month ago, keep elevating brother man.


IAmBenT – Good verse, not too sure about the ending the missing key thing, I wish it ended with some knowledge instead of being so vague and wide open, but I don't hate the idea. Your writing was very strong in this verse, your use of uncommon words was refreshing, I didn't like the “nostril/tonsil” line because I don't think tonsils taste anything bro, haha.

Originally Posted by IAmBenT

..and with the three-pin Mayfield clamp, the bot belabored
The hair patch, intact, once botched with shots of lasers,
Now stood, our good doc, head sandwiched in bandages
Took good stock of his bot’s “mess”, scanning for damages
His laughter swelled, 4 and a half seconds after held
No twitch! He felt as if he had come back from hell!!…

A story about a Dr. with Parkinson searching for a cure, he finally goes with his final attempt at the cure using himself as the patient instead of killing another. Success, and now the doctor has untapped and uncapped knowledge. Great writing, very easy to follow despite using “Doctor Terms”. You used the language in such a way that even if I didn't know the word I understood what your were saying. All in all a very well written verse, Thank you for that. I feel like writing this took plenty of research, it shows, and kudos on great level of execution on a high level of difficulty.



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THE AOWL OFFICIAL CONFERENCE & DIVISIONAL STANDINGS

TITANIUM CONFERENCE

BLACK

1. Ink (3-2) --
2. Vinzr (3-2) --
3. patrown (2-2) 1mb
4. dead man (2-2) 1mb
5. TYSON (2-2) 1mb

BLUE

1. Mike Wrecka (5-3) --
2. Objective (2-2) 2mb
3. Genocide (2-3) 2.5mb
4. nO gOod! (0-1) 5mb
5. Venom (0-1) 5mb

GREEN

1. Frank (6-1) --
2. Witty (3-3) 3.5mb
3. ZeeDee (2-2) 4.5mb
4. Camp Bell (1-3) 5.5mb
5. Aesthetic (0-3) 6.5mb

PURPLE

1. Nigma (4-2) --
2. King Keith (4-2) --
3. Que (1-0) 2.5mb
4. Xces (1-0) 2.5mb
5. Devil's Reject (0-2) 4mb


PLATINUM CONFERENCE

RED

1. zygote (6-1) --
2. IAmBenT (4-1) 2mb
3. Split (4-3) 2.5mb
4. Mac (2-2) 4.5mb
5. Juxtaposition (1-0) 5mb

WHITE

1. Adonis (4-1) --
2. Vulgar (2-0) 2mb
3. Zenland (4-4) 3.5mb
4. Atheist (2-5) 5.5mb
5. Just Write (0-1) 6mb

YELLOW

1. pohfig (4-2) --
2. TopicalDood5 (3-0) .5mb
3. c.d.m. (2-6) 6mb
4. HelloKitty (1-3) 6.5mb
5. Malachi (0-3) 7mb

ORANGE

1. Red glare (5-2) --
2. Cereal_Killa (2-1) 3.5mb
3. Innovator (3-5) 4.5mb
4. fenix osiris (1-0) 5mb
5. cakecakecake (0-3) 7mb

*mb= match ups behind (wins)



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AOWL POWER RANKINGS


1. Frank (Titanium) (3x AOWL Champion) (6-1)------- this week: vs. vs. ZeeDee (2-2)

After 3 successful title defenses, Frank the Great finally suffered his first loss of the season last week to zygote. While that may be the case, he holds on to the #1 spot in the Power Rankings due to a solid strength of victories. But not for long. If zygote wins the championship match this week, he will fall down to the #2 spot & that also depends if he wins his match up this week.

2. zygote (Platinum) (1x AOWL Champion- current) (5-1)------- this week: vs. Mike Wrecka (5-3)

zygote finally had his way the second time around, toppling Frank last week and becoming only the second competitor other than him to hold the title. This week, he makes his first defense against a strong competitor in Mike Wrecka. A win will move zygote to the #1 spot in the rankings.

3. Red glare (Titanium) (5-2)------- this week: Adonis (4-1)

Red jumps up two spots in the rankings as he once again will have a shot to get the title if he manages to win against Adonis this week. Red has been a major threat in recent weeks, even in his last loss. Can he get the title & a #1 spot? We will wait to see.

4. Mike Wrecka (Titanium) (5-3)------- this week: vs. zygote (6-1)

After a slight slump, Mike is back on top & now, he finally has his chance at the title. He moves up two spots this week & a win against zygote along with losses from Frank & Red, will put the Wrecker at the top of the AOWL. Who would've thought that could happen?


5. Adonis (Platinum) (4-1)------- this week: vs. Red glare (5-2)

Adonis loss to zygote in the previous Contenders Match so it's most certain he will be looking to get that title match this time around. Since Adonis joined the league 5 weeks ago, he has proved to be one of the best writers in the league. He leads the White division & a title shot & win would be very huge for him.


6. pohfig (Platinum) (4-2)------- this week: vs. IAmBenT (4-1)

poh came back last week and loss a very close one to Red. The loss dropped him down two spots, but he still remains a top threat to any writer, having had the most difficult match ups this season. This week, he can climb back up with a win over high riser, IAmBenT, and potentially getting a shot in a contenders match.

7. King Keith (Titanium) (4-2)------- this week: vs. Objective (2-2)

8. IAmBenT (Platinum) (4-1)------- this week: vs. pohfig (4-2)

BenT is on a 3 match win streak and is a very strong writer, hence his debut in the Power Rankings this week. He only trails zygote by 2 matches in the Red division & a win here against a very formidable opponent in pohfig plus a zygote slip up would make things very, very interesting.

9. TopicalDood5 (Platinum) (3-0)------- this week: vs. c.d.m. (2-6)

TopicalDood has started off extremely well this late in the season & looks to be the only challenge to pohfig in the Yellow division.This weeks match for him is tricky though. A win won't do much but a loss would be a bit damaging.

10. Vulgar (Platinum) (2-0)------- this week: OUT.

Vulgar has quickly put together back-to-back wins and rounds out the Power Rankings at #10. This week, he is off but will return next week. He's only within striking distance of Adonis in the White division. A couple victories strung together would put him up there to possibly get a title match before the regular season comes to a close.