Arid: I really liked the transitions from rhyme to rhyme in the first few lines. It was great. The alliteration carried the flow along nicely. Really isn't much else to say, it was a well written verse. Record it.
Nyc: This started off slow in my opinion, but at around the middle of it it started to pick up. Your rhyming wasn't as impressive as arid's, but it did resonate with me better. For that, I'd say you had the better verse.
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