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Old 12-16-2014, 11:54 PM   #5
Pent uP
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Arid -- nostalgic, short lived. I loved it - flow, diction, the rawness of it - you just stared at the league and vibed to the beat..its perfect in its own right. Some interesting rhyme transitions, and youre in the rhyme which is interesting (to me). Theres nothing to say about this piece really, its standalone and the only people that dont get it simply werent there.

Nyc -- doooope. Man that line in the beginning about being chained to a ghost...MAN. there were was a piece where i mistakingly thought there was a tone change for a second so I has to reread it. I love the (seemingly) reflective nature of the verse, and it seems earnest in its attempt, which ties the tone and subject together. Love it.

Excellent match gents. You have both displayed a knack for the intangibles. I cant explain what makes these verses as good as they are, I just enjoyed them for different reasons.

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