jilti:
Wasn't feeling your opener much. I think you could have taken a different route on the execution and made it a tad bit more harsher, bro. Alexander Wang was creative but a bit of a reach. Had no real harshness or insult factor either, IMO. Tacoma State pretty much falls in the same plain field as the previous bars man. Your concepts are dope, but they aren't executed to their potential bro. This could have been delivered differently and a tad bit harsher as well. Wasn't feeling the rampage reference. Menudo was lol, but lack luster. Modify was cool. Alcohol was cool. Closer was a bit of a reach. Overall, you have dope concepts dude. I think your executions/wording kills hinders them, tho. Your concepts have the power, to land potentially a jaw breaker but they fall flat and end up slap boxing, feel me? I think if you took more time on them and tried to deliver them in a more crucial/harsh manner, you'd definitely be a lot better man. I always enjoy reading your shit due to your creativity and choice of concepts but the bars end up falling flat for me. Keep writing, tho.
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Allen Knightmare:
Opener was solid. Didn't like Loki, much. Seen a lot of Loki plays and even tho yours was probably one of the better ones, wasn't feeling it. Padawana was nice. Gyllenhaal is a minor reach but worked, IMO and was creative as well as nice. Neeson was dope. Mettenberger was nice. Macan was some what of a reach but kind of worked and was nice. Lol @ closer, pretty solid. NOt much I can say about your verse. The typical AK verse, sports bars, creative wordplays but much better wording this time around. Usually your wording is rough but I think this is probably one of your better drops. Which, I'm sure you applied yourself to ensure you didn't catch and L by Jilt, hahaha. Solid drop.
v/Allen Knight - consistent and punches were more effective, IMO.
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