UnbornBuddha: The first stanza didn't add enough to justify itself. Instead you threw your readers for a boring loop around a professorial lecture. But the last stanza was really strong, some good thoughts that perhaps could have been worded a bit less upright but still effective. You've improved a lot in this league, especially with regards to rhyme scheme. This was a verse worthy of the contender match.
zygote: The content here was as good as any this season. The organization and tone were great, and I liked the approach to the topic. My only complaint at all is that I wish you had done more with the rhyme scheme and cadence. I think you could have cut a few syllables out of a few lines and made it work. UnbornBuddha definitely had you in that realm. Still, your execution was on another level from his.
Vote: zygote
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