[UnbornBuddha]

Soulstice, I am an avid fan of how you describe scenes, and play with words. To some it may come off as flowery, but to my conscious it comes of as very metrical, and serene. You are also very good when it comes to writing this short pieces. For example, what you came up with last week was composed with a delicate artistic touch. Albeit, from what I have read from you it is apparent you tend to dash through your creative process, and what results is something elegant due to your years of experience. However, with a fine eye it is clear that your heart did not fully become immersed into your creation. Thus, what is created is an incomplete substance. Perhaps, this comes about because your poetic complexity tends to overshadow the essence causing the reader overlook it. Discouraged, or perhaps due to a lack of time the quintessence of what your fully capable of becomes blurred. Anyways, not to take anything from what you provided, I just thought to chirp the commentary scripted in my mind. I enjoyed the language, and the metaphors.

NY- The historical take was very vivid, and seems to encompass the man Thomas appeared to represent himself as. A memory came to mind as I read your verse; it was a memory of a younger me listening to a 33 degree Mason spouting off the admiration for Jefferson, and Benjamin Franklin. This deceased individuals represent of culmination of thought that became token characters for those who see themselves as carrying their torch. A torch whose fire spreads the contagion of freedom. But, also as you succinctly stated there is always another side to this heat. In this case, Jefferson was a slave connoisseur. There is also this enigma foreshadowing their very decisions that they made, so as to achieve a greater purpose, and what went behind the scenes when deciding how to go about through quandary times. Some of your wording is a bit off, I think. This line in particular "growing up with kids' parents immoral handling slaves. The placement of immoral I believe should come before the parents. Now, I usually don't care so much for derisory details. But, as I become accustomed to reading from you I notice the paltry details, and see that you tend to word things a bit odd at times. I'm sure you you know how to, it may be due to confidence in your own ability that you become negligent at times, even when you have a tendency to look for the perfect wording to express what is lodged in your tongue.

Given the completeness of the work my vote is casted forth to NYCSPITZ.