Crack stems in the face of the people on drugs
And to think, yesterday these were people i loved
-whoa
My face aimed in shame at the ground in this room
Dying of thirst, looking for the fountain of youth
-daaamn neva heard a drinking reference to the fountain of youth...Dope
I walk a flatline of my past time, memories stirred
Bring smiles to friends of mine and haunt enemies nerves
-imagery is Nice wit' this one
this piece is dope as hell man...Like the short connecting lines made it easy to read, and stay smooth...Not much filler either..everything went good wit' the story..
I woulda liked a twist wit' the ending...thought u were gonna flip somethin' crazy wit' the girlfriend visit somehow
But nothin' taken away from this...Overall this is well written..enjoyed it my dude
HoLLa
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