[Soulstice]

Pent - the story here is the evolution from wide eyed youth to demonized killer. How did that transition develop - it was well rooted, trying to become what once saved him, meanwhile, he is torn in a society that paints things in black and white so stubbornly. The wording in each line was kind of eh, but the themes were screaming at me and were so strongly developed without throwing them in my face it made up for it. Nice take on the state of things.

Certain - I personally think that the atheist/theist debate comes down to one group attacking the other on a holistic organizational level and the other side defending themselves on a personal level. ie - the cardinal bishops are raping children! well, i find peace in going to church, im not a pedophile myself or godless men are partaking in senseless violence! you dont see me partaking in the crusades buddy. So what I search for in your verse is a reconciling of those differences in bringing that debate to a standstill (or some form of closure) where both sides are arguing on an even keel. Hopefully that makes sense. Anyway, I don't think you whiffed but I don't think you hit it out of the park entirely. I finished the verse and nodded my head, if you will.

So Pent manages to capture the pressures of a generation against the personal trials of one policeman, while Certain dabbles in organizational and personal tear-downs.
V/ Pentup for stringing together more things conceptually