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Pent uP · 12-08-2014, 11:10 PM

Zyg - strong ender. Opener was completely unnecessary. The entire verse can be summarized in this quote from sage francis: justice is the whim of a judge. As far as the topic it was a stretch-take on it because it was only conveyed at the end. The second argument (theory) was written the best, however (as per pattern) the allegories you use are just old anecdotes. Still the level of creativity is high.

Buddha -- thats a lot to digest. There hints of Zygs style here....or your style in Zyg? I dont know but it was interesting. Either way, the first stanza was a lot more specific than the second. I liked the second stanza more because it allowed me to connect the dots my own way (I suppose). I think the ending is where you stifled though, it felt like you were forcing your decision unto me as opposed to continuing to let me decide. In that sense, at the same time, that is a solid subtext to the topic. Very strong showing - stellar mechanics and approach.

BoTW in my opinion, and its hard for me to decide but in the end I must decide.

vote - Buddha. ..

12-08-2014, 11:10 PM	#6
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,499 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862275	Zyg - strong ender. Opener was completely unnecessary. The entire verse can be summarized in this quote from sage francis: justice is the whim of a judge. As far as the topic it was a stretch-take on it because it was only conveyed at the end. The second argument (theory) was written the best, however (as per pattern) the allegories you use are just old anecdotes. Still the level of creativity is high. Buddha -- thats a lot to digest. There hints of Zygs style here....or your style in Zyg? I dont know but it was interesting. Either way, the first stanza was a lot more specific than the second. I liked the second stanza more because it allowed me to connect the dots my own way (I suppose). I think the ending is where you stifled though, it felt like you were forcing your decision unto me as opposed to continuing to let me decide. In that sense, at the same time, that is a solid subtext to the topic. Very strong showing - stellar mechanics and approach. BoTW in my opinion, and its hard for me to decide but in the end I must decide. vote - Buddha. .. Last edited by Pent uP; 12-08-2014 at 11:24 PM.