Zygote- the gist that u used this as a essay was brilliant. Pure spoken word. Nothing to over the top but just at the right medium to make this verse read fluid. The content laid perfection and wording was used precisely. The knowledge u presented in this was just the perfect touch and it kept me on the edge... would I have asked for a little umph. .. In the rhyme maybe but for the approach u took doesn't need that formality and expressed the verse with such brilliance man.
Unborn- I honestly loved this verse better than the last 2 I read from you. You staggered with the emotion but it sort of felt like it was on purpose. The right setting u waited to go all in which was after ur breaker leading to the second stanza.. u went in with ur content and diction and created a nice image and detail paid well.
Both of u stayed consistent and then surprisingly by z ' 3rd stanza and also but unborn 3rd stanza ya both picked up expeditiously and just laid it all out in a sense. This is a hard choice and both went in and held to each such great work. At the end of the day I have to go with creativity and who entered to that extreme to display it eloquently. I got zygote.
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