Pent up- you had a very mind set vision and proved it to be somewhat of a trickle of what u had in plan. The main facet of this verse was the connection between reader and writer. The placements of emotion was correlated to put us in those shoes in a sense and make us feel prosperous as the character. The fact it's a current event is cool not a view people really execute... Some hiccups I felt went bland but overall a solid piece thru out.
Certain- u took the imagery to a whole new level and went the opposite with Pent and created a whole world that is also current today. The argument of religion and facade of God being the demeanor of the lesser such as the church and people who faith them as apostles in flesh to tell us about god. Some things g in my neck of the woods happens alot. U detailed it to me honestly a little over the top but I guess u knew Pent will come correct so u put ur best foot forward.
Both were great awesome and all but I can only choose one and I gotta go with....... Pent up for his simple approach but his wording was clean and fresh fleshed out the ideal and really took his character in a build for the reader to feel don't get me wrong certain was splendid but it came down to which came to me more ad a whole and pets squeezed by....
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