Soul, I feel like you would benefit from adding more to your work
the fact of the matter is that you have a firm grasp on how to write
it's just that you don't write more than I know you are capable of doing
your verse stands out as a very well written 'beginning' to your tale
and as you progress I feel like you could do so much more with your verse
just some sound advice for you my friend, nice work...
NYC, the beginning of your verse confused me due to the word 'lead'
I always read it as a material used and not an action most pursue...
but I digress, you place the character into an area of his own expertise
you bring him out of his shell and make him someone you might know
it really brings out a smooth flow to the story as it unravels and ends
there's really nothing to nitpick other than the fact you outwrote your opponent
v/NYC, a more thought out verse and an amazing take on storytelling
nice work my dude, keep writing
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