Wicked
B1 - Set up wasn't too impressive but the punch wasnt too bad.
B2 - better. Nice flow but weak punch - you gotta rip into him
B3 - once again you have a good concept but fail to make it cut into him - had potential though.
B4- Clever and finally directed something , albeit subtly personal towards him - build on bars like this.
B5 - Nice flip here, felt appropriate for a closer aswell.
Aesthetic
B1 - just basic aggressive statements imo - potential for audio but not text
B2 - once again had an okay flow but substance was lacking - you need to really hurt him
B3 - I actually liked this one but still a bit basic. Turn some of those metaphors into punches.
The rest of your bars just confused me structurally - saw a few good concepts but pretty much the same in terms of punchlines/personal attacks etc.
My votes going to wicked
Hope to see more battles and improvement from both
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