flow was the highlight in this easy. as a whole, it started off strong and then took a turn for the worse before spiking back before it all came to a close.
But I'll never burn out there's no stopping a star.
I know what you are saying here but the large majority of stars do actually burn out and therefore this line acts against you
That only holds back just to worsen the blows
this however is that sly shit that is super fucking cool. "i have to step back to not knock you the fuck out" i dig this line a lot. the idea behind it is super simple but the way it was presented made it a highlight. this does seem like something you wrote quickly, would like to see something more cohesive as a whole.
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