dead man, I liked this verse. I think that it's because you were able to take this picture & add some flare to it. Because you have the image already, you didn't have to paint your verse with imagery, though, I also liked the fact that you still brought some of the picture to more depth & detail with your descriptions. The writing as always was flawlessly smooth & you strung each line beautifully. This read like a championship verse. Certain, I could tell as soon as I started reading your piece that you were going that route. I'm not talking about the direction you chose necessarily, but the fact you veered off from what you've been doing all season to drop something different. This sort of reminded me of the route you took in the AOWL championship. Rather than go the direction most writers normally would, you expanded a bit more broad & beyond, this time giving us a perspective on a variety of topics all driven from your take on the image. I would say, the approach itself was a nice take but indeed risky. I like the points you give in each section & the repetition to drive your points. The writing was good as well, which says a lot. You've been very consistent in that department. But reading both of these pieces, I'd have to say, dead's just seemed more complete overall where he focused on detailing his thoughts from the image whereas Cert went a more broader route, which left much more to be desired. I believe it was what he wanted to do, knowing dead man's approach & writing style, but here dead managed to put it all together with an exclamation point.
MVGT: dead man. Good job by both competitors.
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