Netcees - View Single Post - WK8: Soulstice (2-3) vs. timeless (3-4) [Soulstice wins, 6-1.]

Pent uP · 12-02-2014, 01:23 AM

Soul -- two spirits in space/debris of god/ghosts orbiting and that whole train of thought was bonkers. I love shit like this -- in the same respect you enjoyed my verse this week I appreciate how youre verse made me explore an atmosphere (pun?) and draw from my own imagination the design of the string that connects canvass.

Timeless -- I had a bit of a hard time digesting this and I think its due to the cohesiveness and fluidity of thoughts. The verse has a lot of depth behind it, but its hidden behind a slew of idioms and anecdotes that dont coincide together. I appreciated the reoccuring sailor bits, but they were broken by other metaphors and didn't properly portray the tone of what was actually stated to be happening. Shame you signed out.

vote soul

12-02-2014, 01:23 AM	#9
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,499 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862275	Soul -- two spirits in space/debris of god/ghosts orbiting and that whole train of thought was bonkers. I love shit like this -- in the same respect you enjoyed my verse this week I appreciate how youre verse made me explore an atmosphere (pun?) and draw from my own imagination the design of the string that connects canvass. Timeless -- I had a bit of a hard time digesting this and I think its due to the cohesiveness and fluidity of thoughts. The verse has a lot of depth behind it, but its hidden behind a slew of idioms and anecdotes that dont coincide together. I appreciated the reoccuring sailor bits, but they were broken by other metaphors and didn't properly portray the tone of what was actually stated to be happening. Shame you signed out. vote soul Last edited by Pent uP; 12-02-2014 at 01:31 AM.