Arid, for your debut match, I'd say you did an okay job here. I can see that you're good at rhyming, your piece flowed well but really that's all I got from it. I didn't see too much connection with the image. This read more like an open mic drop than a topical/story. The little I did see that related to the picture was towards the end, where "lungs rancid brown/underground" was really clearly the only line that I could relate towards the pic. If there was a much deeper connection, then I don't see it, and that'd be because the thoughts you laid out didn't necessarily indicate such. Nonetheless, it'll be interesting to see what you can come up with in the last remaining weeks of the season. CopyPat, this wasn't your best work, but it was a solid piece overall. You approached the image directly, and allowed your superb rhyming to guide your piece from beginning to end. I take it you're born/raised in Canada? This definitely read like a tribute, but the bit of imagery of coming out to the lake & this is what you see thing was pretty cool & a great way to summarize your piece.
MVGT: CopyPat. Good job by both competitors.
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