Netcees - View Single Post - WK8: Pent uP (1-1) vs. Storyteller (1-1) [Pent uP wins, 6-0.]

King Ra. · 12-02-2014, 12:53 AM

Valiant effort by both competitors here. Pent, it's a pleasure to once again read your work in this league & this week I'm reminded of how good you are & the threat you can pose to others come playoff time. I was a bit surprised this wasn't a narrative, because you usually go in that direction, but I think this topical approach works here, especially with the image you decided to go with (zygote & NYC wrote to the same image). What stands out is your rhyming & flow from start to finish, which made this easy to digest & read. Your rhyming was really on point. I liked a lot of the phrases you used to summarize your approach to the image. It was as if these were written as the thoughts of the nomad with the horse viewing the heaven-like object amazed at it's presence. You did have your perspective thoughts driving the piece as well, & the ending was a nice finishing touch to sum it all up. Storyteller, you knew what you were up against this week, and firstly, I have to say, I am reallly impressed with the level of writing you came with in this match. It made this very enjoyable & you probably have shown that you can be just as good as any other writer in this league. I sensed the high level approach here- your rhyming was pretty solid throughout. You portrayed your thoughts clearly & intricately, the writing had a bit of flair. Your concept, which from what I understood, was likening your place in writing with the robot- you're stuck between a rock & a hard place. Difficulty expressing ideas? Coming up with concepts? This is what I interpret with the "-WRITERS BLOCK" at the end, and if I am anywhere near correct, I must say, the approach you took here to the image is probably one of the better this week. It was fresh & interesting. I would say overall in this match up, Pent seemed to connect on a much more clearer level while writing a bit better mechanically. But Storyteller, if you manage to write this well with a bit more polish- you can be a threat in this league. Best I've read from you thus far.

MVGT: Pent uP. Good job by both competitors.

12-02-2014, 12:53 AM	#9
King Ra. The Throne, The Crown Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,667 Battle Record: 21-35 Rep Power: 1932963	Valiant effort by both competitors here. Pent, it's a pleasure to once again read your work in this league & this week I'm reminded of how good you are & the threat you can pose to others come playoff time. I was a bit surprised this wasn't a narrative, because you usually go in that direction, but I think this topical approach works here, especially with the image you decided to go with (zygote & NYC wrote to the same image). What stands out is your rhyming & flow from start to finish, which made this easy to digest & read. Your rhyming was really on point. I liked a lot of the phrases you used to summarize your approach to the image. It was as if these were written as the thoughts of the nomad with the horse viewing the heaven-like object amazed at it's presence. You did have your perspective thoughts driving the piece as well, & the ending was a nice finishing touch to sum it all up. Storyteller, you knew what you were up against this week, and firstly, I have to say, I am reallly impressed with the level of writing you came with in this match. It made this very enjoyable & you probably have shown that you can be just as good as any other writer in this league. I sensed the high level approach here- your rhyming was pretty solid throughout. You portrayed your thoughts clearly & intricately, the writing had a bit of flair. Your concept, which from what I understood, was likening your place in writing with the robot- you're stuck between a rock & a hard place. Difficulty expressing ideas? Coming up with concepts? This is what I interpret with the "-WRITERS BLOCK" at the end, and if I am anywhere near correct, I must say, the approach you took here to the image is probably one of the better this week. It was fresh & interesting. I would say overall in this match up, Pent seemed to connect on a much more clearer level while writing a bit better mechanically. But Storyteller, if you manage to write this well with a bit more polish- you can be a threat in this league. Best I've read from you thus far. MVGT: Pent uP. Good job by both competitors. __________________ Vetwork, bitches.