[Soulstice]

I immediately notice two contrasting things about these verses. Certain began at a certain image/concept and expanded outwardly touching on all sorts of topics. Race issues, animalistic violence, xenophobia, and the laziness of Middle america. All emoting from the singular picture. Black, however, is quite the opposite. Juxtaposing cities and forests along with imagery connotative to both (junkies, marshes) leading to one metaphorical culmination. Now does the question become" a. which was executed better or b. which do I like more? Well - Certain has a mastery of the repeating chorus in topicals - so much so I wish he would use it less often as I think it has a time and place - however here was the time and place. Each repitition was his own tongue in cheek jab at what he was doing - look how many problems I can write about going off one screenshot!! Meanwhile, Blacketh is excellent at drawing as many related metaphors from one or two image concepts as he can - here the city and forest. It is his standard fare, although lets remember his standard fare has earned him a legendary nod on this forum. I think I liked Certain's approach better, and the way he structured his verse. Black's flow and emotion were better, and on a superficial level I enjoyed his more. I thought the call-backs to the safety of home while your character toured the wilderness were my favorite part. However, on a writer-appreciation level, I think I enjoyed Certains more. Think. Fuck.

v - certain