Timeless the elevation's apparent and I generally enjoyed your verse ona 7.5 out of 10 level. Thought you could have been a bit better delivery wise but if you work on your precision it'd be completely vicious. Lines such as "Lately though, dollars spent prevailing receipts from within." I get what you mean, money over a higher form of contentedness found in the Self, but it's worded a bit awkwardly. As much as I hate to do it I have to vote for soulstice who I believe to have performed also on a 7.5/10 level. He probably thinks it's far lower compared to the usual but the laconic language appealed to me. I'm also biased because I was going to use that picture before I saw Zygote jacked my style so I felt entitled to put together some type of rejoinder based on the same image. Anyways thought the profundity of the piece was cool from the granite line to the final few lines there.
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