The thought process in this correlated well with the wording chosen. You have a good knack for synthesizing and infusing your prose with specific nuance. You are what the Chinese call a "metal personality", in terms of a writer's voice at least. A metal personality is akin to the ether's. However, since form arose from the great formless ether metal personalities prefer order, like judges and policeman. You structure your verse in such a way that you can finely find the most specific word to describe the emotion, or lack of that you are trying to convey therein. Metals like details, and organization.
This obviously has a very astute presentation to it. The deliverance of it is smooth, and there is this theme of desperation that ruminates and looms in it's atmosphere. There is this heaviness factor amidst the splash of melancholy. So it isn't just any type of melancholy/ regret it is one based on a weightiness that is bearing hard on your apertures, and the perception that emanates from them. In the last lines you shifted gears and started to talk about amor. A broken heart whose solution is chaos , though rarely does lust and such mend a decrepit heart. This is some of what I derived.
I enjoyed it, and it is a bit more emotionally based than what I have read from you. You usually have a more archaic coding that one has to decipher, in order to get a grander grasp, or a fuller appreciation of what is being said, and how it's being said.
In terms of commentary, I will say that the last couplets felt a bit more distorted. Although, they went with the overarching feel, they still felt misplaced for some reason. Perhaps, because they tried to embody or pinpoint the characteristics of internal and outward bitterness to a specific cause. But, in doing so you deviated from the essence of what you had developed through the beginning and middle stanzas.
Anyways,
Thank you, appreciate the read.
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