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zygote:
The titles to your verses never cease to amuse me.
This kind of reminds me of my topic for this week on the movie Nine (shameless plug). Humans being destroyed by technology... Writing this from the perspective of the computer giving a standard report was pretty fresh and I liked how that enabled you to go from point to point naturally in your narrative.

Frank:
There was a line or two that stood alone and made me pause.. You killed that first stanza. I liked the second but as I kept reading the verse started to kind of fizzle off... It felt diluted by the sheer amount of words and lines in the verse... I loved the details, but even there it felt a little too draggy.. I feel like if this verse was half the length, it would have been a killer verse.. It's still good and I liked it.. but by the time I reached the end I didn't feel like what I got out of the piece justified the amount of lines I read..

Vote: Zygote