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Old 11-24-2014, 06:36 PM   #5
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Soul, I feel you verse was well crafted for what it was
you made your approach short and sweet compared to your opponents
which shows your grasp on what you were aiming for...
the smooth shift from line to line builds up to a great transition
it comes off more poetic, and for that it shows your versatility
nice work my dude...

timeless, I feel your verse was crafted in a moment's notice..
which is cool if you have the vibe you are going for right away
I sometimes...matter of fact always craft my verses on the fly
they either work or they don't, I think you put too much emphasis on rhyme
I'm not against how you approached this at all because it suits the topic perfectly
at which point I can't figure out which topic Soul is crafting his verse on
sooooo...good job breh

v/timeless, I may get some flack for my vote..but I feel Soul dropped a quick verse and neglected what his verse could have been
I know it may have been effected due to the deadline being close and the site being down
I feel you may have had a great verse & would have shown me a topic worth being excited about
either way nice work from the both of ye...good job timeless...you coming up in the world
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