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Old 11-24-2014, 03:54 PM   #4
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Soulstice, a tight read. Succinct and expressive. I like how effortless this felt. The rhyme and wording carried the narrative along without seeming to try. A bit short, made to seem shorter by the ease with which it read.

Timeless, the wording in places was hard to understand. The rhymes you achieved in these spots was cool, but left me confused about what you were trying to say. Even lines that stood out as coherent ideas had too little context to derive meaning.

Vote-Soulstice for the beautiful simplicity and unique rhyme scheme.
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