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kannon: This was a clever but underdeveloped twist on the Batman legacy. There was too much misdirection, not enough motivation, though. The first three full stanzas essentially were a misdirection play, up until the last line of the third. I'd probably have enjoyed this more if you removed the definition-heavy opening stanza, which felt a bit obvious and uninteresting as a way of hooking a reader, and jumped straight to, "I stand alone." Then added a stanza in between the third and fourth to flesh out the preparation and give the character more specificity and depth. The rhymes and cadence were fine but a little choppier than normal. Your writing style is easy to read and enjoyable until it occasionally gets a bit too complex out of nowhere. But I like it, generally speaking. It's just not quite as smooth as, say, CopyPat's.

Vulgar: Wait, so my verse that ended with the hero getting executed and having his organs systematically removed by the government was too much like Pixar? (Half-joking.) The ending was corny to me, just in that I was kind of hoping she would be able to see and then leave Tiberius in some really buzz-kill type ending. But instead you went with the vastness of beauty beyond sight. The rest of the story was really well-formed, and the characters were interesting. Your storytelling is so impressive, in part because your stories are so unique. This was a strong entry.

Vote: Vulgar