[Soulstice]

Copy - I don't want to advise you to write more 'poetic' or 'wordy' like Certain, who was a perfect foil in this battle. However, there were a lot of phrasings that I see somewhat fit into your style but can still definitely be improved upon. I have no specific suggestions but a brief touch-up of your vocabulary and syntax would do wonders. Definitely don't change too much though. There were moments where the flow and wording was very natural, such as near real ice - steer veer wide. Secondly, you are writing a feel-good piece but the images you evoke in the first stanza are too associated with negatives. Thoughts of death.. freezing ice. This is your character running away from responsibility and having fun! Right? So my feedback here is to try and be a little more aware of the non-deterministic side of language and take a few notes from writers such as certain, dead man, maybe pent up would be good to see how symbols affect an audience. But tailor it to your style, that shit is a much needed breath of fresh air. Cool piece.

Certain - I remember you posted in an interview about you topical battle to offset your opponents strengths. This was an obvious exercise in that strategy. It was cool. There were lines I did like (disposable lies/disposable crowd almost won the battle singlehandedly) and some I didn't (the molly pop culture smorgasbord was a little obtuse and kind of corny anyway). I don't have a lot of feed. I liked the piece it was pretty straightforward, it was evocative and flowed well. You know this, this is the going rate for an internal monologue-esque piece.

So I felt too confused with Copy's piece to vote against Certains this week. Voting certain