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Old 11-18-2014, 11:08 PM   #10
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Dominate -- Kind of a weird verse here...some contradictions internally - you state you want a white man at the beginning and at the end you mention that its non-discriminatory. the 2-line scheme made for kind of a boring read. Microsoft 2007 was lols. Problem with this verse is that none of it was a refreshing angle and the subject was stale.

Deadman -- Dope take on the topic - fits your style very well. I think magnolia bloom is where it popped off for me. "birth a consequence mistaken for chance" - shit like that is amazing when it comes to breaking down the way we view events and their happenstance. I think this was less "movie-film-reel" than your stuff usually (was), but no qualms.

Just realized how shitty I am at voting. Long story short dominates verse did not do much for me; not calling the verse bad - just felt stale to me....Deadman's verse had some sick lines to it and entertained me for a minute

vote -- deadman

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