[dead man]

certain -- this was one of those works that felt like it wrote itself through you. if that makes any sense. it wasn't until the end i realized which topic you may have been referring to, but the narcissism / mirror connection was strong throughout this verse on the second and third read through. i thought your wording, as far as it goes, was a bit clunky on the mind at the beginning. i didnt particularly like the words you chose to rhyme and it sort of drew me out of the beginning portion of this entry. you definitely picked up steam as you continued and seemed to find your stride about 1/3 into it. around

Disposable lies told to a disposable crowd.
Eyes to the ground, shifty. Preferring when no one's around.
It's easier this way. Immersed in minutiae, evoking distortion.
Most people try not to leave themselves open to torment,

you began to sink into a more comfortable rhythm and your colors clicked.

i say this wrote itself because thats the way these works tend to go. something like a character sketch (depending on how evocative the character) seems to spill from a core idea, a baseline personality trait in an effortless stream. the material is at the forefront of your brain. easier to receive, express, so forth

i think you gave us a very well-written study in narcissism and a tad more direct moroseness than I'm used to seeing from you.

highlight:

And that's the problem. Hitting pause, hoping but not assuming
that the world revolves around you because you're the only one not moving.
And there it is. The opposite of a pro is a con. Yes, it's true,
yet the opposite of progress is you.

COPY

i find it hard to dislike this verse. you seem like a cool motherfucker tbh. i definitely respect the very literal, very autobiographical aspect of this drop and mostly everything you write and post here. you are 1 part lyricism and 12 parts personality. very refreshing and light-hearted which is what we really need around here sometimes in contrast to the heavy-handedness that accompanies a lot of the creative urges in this league. you never get tired of being yourself. whats funny is - everything you wrote about here, i already knew about you (as far as the part-time work and taking summers off, living in canada, and stance on the workaholic syndrome) which both helped and hindered your approach here. i liked reading about it, because i like you and your genuine, good-hearted nature -- but it really didnt do anything for me creatively. it was essentially a journal entry that rhymed. well done for sure but nothing that expressed anything provoking or especially transportive. a glimpse into your life that you were able to connect (vaguely) to a topic. an idea, your philosophy on life. i appreciate your execution but with all due respect homie this felt more lazy than anything else.

with that said, although this was a dope champ match --

going with @Certain here

thanks, and take care