timeless - Despite the fact that this was original, it was still ehhh. I agree with kannon's breakdown, I was a bit puzzled with how this was progressing. I can't tell if you rushed it because it seemed grammatically correct and the structure was normal. I've seen better from you. It was an uninspired take on the topic that completely missed the target: the reader.
Dove Dozer - Decent take, wasn't hard hitting. You conveyed your thoughts respectably and some of the bars were solid. Overall, I thought it was an effort on par with timeless' but you made some impact with it.
My vote goes to Dove.
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