Witty. Dope verse. Some incredibly lines and schemes in there. Didnt like the middle church metaphor. Power is a disease was LEGIT foreshadowing yo. 5shadowing. Seems like a timeworn tale until you apply the idea of "growing up" as the catalyst, cause and effect and realize exactly what drives people to become gangsters... At least those who idealize it. One of my favorite recent verses from you. Appears simple w/ rhyming and meaning but what is so amazing is how you created something complex out of simple words and literal events.
Ck. cool allegory for life. Like a mixed allegory or something, cause it represents the relationship it portrays. Good word choice and very disturbing. Can't say I liked how you spread out the plot details tho.
Nervous, nerves of steel to shield but with a will I wield on purpose
Strong, a battle field of love or lust.. Uncertainty feels so worthless
LOTB
v/ Witty. Refreshing direct approach and huge enjoyability factor
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