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Old 11-18-2014, 09:35 AM   #7
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kannon, this was nice. If I remember correctly this is the first thing I've ever read from you and you left a good impression on me with it. The story is one we all know, but I still enjoyed this particularly because of the flow. I could tell that you rap because this flowed effortlessly. The rhymes were over or underwhelming, they were just enough to keep the story moving right along. I enjoyed this.

Vulgar, in the beginning I wasn't really feeling this, especially after I had just read kannon's verse, but when you began to build the world around them it became really great. It seems you have a knack for creating imagery. The line Tiberias with tears in his beard was a really great image that sticks out from this piece, and of course the rhyming was also excellent. There were a couple of instances where I thought the rhymes were too stretched, like the Ptolemy line, but beyond that this was great.

This is a close one, but I've got to go with Vulgar. Thanks for the read, fellas.
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