Storyteller
to me the story kinda read she was rap yeah it was me, I dunno I wasn't craz about it, felt u focusedmore on the twist the rest of the verse, could a done with some more depth
greed
some of the rhyming was so poor the notebook shook Croom thing was just desperate rhyming, she was your sister, you didn't know she was your sister? Maybe I could let it go if you gave some back storyabout why u wasn't close with your family instead of just waking up to your dead sister
gotta go with story was a bit better, I know u both rushed but the battle was there for taking for both of u
vote storyteller
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