Fresh ur punch fell short the build up was fine but but "when I win - she'll wiper HE slate clean and CLEARLY see ur useless traits"... it was worded awkwardly and maybe HE wasn't even supposed to be there idk but it felt choppy and fell short on impact. Jilti the wording fell short as well with misspell or something idk but I got the concept and to me both were choppy but for a better concept I have jilti the windshield and wiper wordplay seemed forced
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