Cereal: Amazing piece. A thing that has started to annoy me in this tournament is the lack of periods. It seems like some of the sentences are endless to me, a simple <br> doesn't do it for me. Beside of that the rest of the piece was amazing. I thoroughly enjoyed the concept of the piece. The whole life/death thing. Idk and I might be thinking more about the verse than you did, but seeing how the verse is named Symbolization I understood it as the ''woman'' being the pure side of a human being and the ''violent man'' being the one that tempts to destroy it. Since it's all about gangster I read it all as a young man killing someone for his first time and how the glamorization of the lifestyle lead him/her to it. This might not have been your initial idea for all I know, but I enjoyed the read with this understanding.
Witty: A straight forward approach to the topic. Decent verse with a decent rhymescheme, nothing spectacular. The imagery was dope but i'd like to see more to be honest as the story itself wasn't really that engaging. The closure was dope though. But all in all, a decent verse that could have been a lot more.
Final Vote - Cereal Killer.
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