yo this was sicks fuck man. Your flow was near perfect the whole way through, don't think I came across any slip ups in the flow at all. Your rhyme schemes were dope throughout as well, end multis were all great and you had tons of internal rhymes which helped make the flow as sick as it is. But the thing that really caught my eye with this piece was the way you pregressed through the story, you didn't drag anything on or rush any thing. Imagery was top notch, and every line meant something and went with the piece. No filller lines at all and your word choice was great and fit the piece perfectly. This was a great read man. Keep it up. Peace.
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