[UnbornBuddha]

Beautiful entries...

Dominate: I will first blatantly state that your approach was in my eyes more creative than Dead's. Even though I've actually seen this employer format be used before, this was a bit more imaginative due to the superhero connotations in it. While Dead had a central theme, your approach had less allusion and in a way had more of a building pace to it. The bullet points added to the stylistic engorgement you were aiming for. It literally read like an employment ad, in which one will submit their cover letter and what not. The requirements of the Microsoft word was indeed a humorous addition. The rhyming was not as poignant as some of your other of your entries. For example, you did not continue a scheme for too long. But that doesn't really matter because here you decided to deliver an objective, which you did. Although with such a direct hero approach it became a bit trite as I read on. Partly because there was no real climax, or suspense just bullet points highlighting the requirements for employment into S..H.I.E.L.D. Thus, halfway through the verse it became blatant there was to be no twist, or surprise factor. Not to say I did not like it. It was a direct approach, but with such comes about sacrificing some element or another.

Deadman: I thoroughly enjoyed this composite. A lot of times your pieces are like jigsaw puzzles not because their puzzling. But more because each line presents an image, and at the end you have to piece it together to form a central theme. Although each line of yours establishes an axis that hints at the connectivity of it all. This piece I felt had less of the usual plethora of randomness that chaotically swirl about until it forms some kind of order/ format. This creation although philosophical in its approach had a very obviousness to it. Nowhere was there a mistaking in identification between what was the finger and the moon. A Chan metaphor to depict the clarity of being able to use the endowed mind to perceive reality clearly, without the destructive conundrums with an inherent distracting nature. You put together a piece essentially about the singularity and self existent nature of the mind/ self. Although it had more philosophical implications to it, rather than a theological. For it did not carry any transient or trans human factors like that found in Indian thought, for example. It was more a depiction of how phenomena and the mind interact, but any interaction is solely based on the singularity of the self, and the experiential nature of its inner workings. Thus, in recollecting this "by reducing yourself to a thought" one can then start to perceive not just phenomena, but oneself with the light of awareness. Although, you also at points ranted essentially about nihilistic implications. Denouncing dependent creation, and emphasizing that "birth a consequence mistaken for chance" Proceeded by "more echo in the void than a creationist rant, not yet brains in a vat. more like a chain of reactions". Chains of reactions= causality and effect. Anyways, instead of continuing extrapolating and examining the verse. I shall vote.

I felt I connected more with Dead's. Dominate while yours at first glance caught my attention more due to its comical input. Though, ultimately Deadman's piece was more true to my heart. It fostered much reflection, evoking a great deal of understanding mental processes.

Vote: Deadman